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Friday, 8 June 2018

Painting a picture in a readers head

WALT use our scenes in our writing to paint a picture in our head.
Here is an example of my writing.  Can you imagine the scenes in your head?

 I was going on a spy mission down in the UK. I saw some people walking across the Military Base. I went inside and hid in a box. Bang! A gun shot at me. I was so so scared I ran back out then everyone started to chase me. I called back up then my whole team come in tanks. Boom ! Boom ! Boom ! Boom ! The tanks in my team shot the enemy all down. I was hiding in a bush it felt like I was looking for any bad people that had survived.

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  1. Gary Roberts20 June 2018 at 12:25

    Malo Sam, thanks for sharing your writing. I was able to picture what was happening in my head - well done! I have a question, why were you spying in the UK and who were you spying on?

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